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Homeschooling Vs. Public School
发布时间:2016-04-18 10:27:01 作者:张兴媛  发布者:2513605749 浏览次数:3261  类别:英文作文  
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Homeschooling versus pubic school is an ongoing debate since quite a while. Whereas, opinion concerning it varies from person to person. Some people believe homeschooling has unmatched merits, while others claim state school is of value in many aspects. By and large, there is probably some truth in both, whereas, I tend to the former one and reasons chiefly as follows. In the first place, homeschooling makes children learn effectively. Owing to neither do they complete homework of acquired knowledge nor deliver to bullies that of public schools. A case in point is the taiwanese writer, Sanmao, who dropped out for being humiliated by her teacher, but gain literary prowess home. In the second place, homeschooled child is of character. It's on account of that they don't attempt to be like anyone else to fit in, while as state school students, we may alter personality simply to please others. What's worse, Chinese public schools adapt to educational patterns for nothing but college entrance examination which only concentrates on grades. By way of contrast, homeschooling foster creative adults of personality. Whereas, those who harbor the view that provided schools are superior state here're various activities and students meet up with beings of sorts, which is objective. However, as it is, students there contact primarily with teachers and schoolfellows, too over- protected to cope with complex society. Contrarily, kids, homeschooled ones, get in touch with men of different ages, origin and jobs and participate in activities in bigger stages. To sum up, home schooling has significant merits and more parents are gradually turning to it. For all that, it's imperative to take child's and family's requirements into account. Either way, if that's maintained, then schooling mode is immaterial.
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  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2016/4/19 22:32:26
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    Homeschooling versus (or,表示“或者”“还是”) pubic school is an ongoing debate since (for) quite a while. Whereas, opinion concerning it改成这样不影响文章表达)varies from person to person. Some people believe that homeschoolings has (have,主谓一致) unmatched merits, while others claim state schools is (are) of value in many aspects. By and large, there is probably some truth in both, whereas, I tend to the former one and chiefly reasons as follows.

      In the first place, homeschooling makes children learn effectively. Owing to neither do they complete homework of acquired knowledge nor deliver to (tolorate,忍受) bullies that of public school students. A case in point is the taiwanese writer, Sanmao (Echo,这是台湾女作家三毛的英语名字), who dropped out for (due to,由于) being humiliated by her teacher, but gain literary prowess (achievements,成就) in her home.

      In the second place, homeschooled child is of character. It's on account of that they don't attempt to be like anyone else who has to fit in, while as state school students, we may alter personality simply to please others. What's worse, Chinese public schools adapt to (cultivatation,培养) educational patterns for (refers,参照) nothing but college entrance examination which only concentrates on grades. By way of contrast, homeschooling foster creative adults of personality. Whereas, those who harbor the view that provided schools are superior state here're various activities and students meet up with beings of sorts, which is objective. However, as it is, students there contact primarily with teachers and schoolfellows, too over- protected to cope with complex society. Contrarily, kids, homeschooled ones, get in touch with men of different ages, origin and jobs and participate in activities in bigger stages. To sum up, home schooling has significant merits and more parents are gradually turning to it. For all that, it's imperative to take child's and family's requirements into account. Either way, if that's maintained, then schooling mode is immaterial.

  • 批改教师:汤超然 ( 云南省 >> 昆明市 >> 西山区 )
    批改时间:2019/7/29 15:47:57
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    Homeschooling versus pubic school is an ongoing debate since quite a while. Whereas, opinion concerning it varies from person to person. Some people believe homeschooling has unmatched merits, while others claim state school is of value in many aspects. By and large, there is probably some truth in both, whereas, I tend to the former one and reasons chiefly as follows. In the first place, homeschooling makes children learn effectively. Owing to neither do they complete homework of acquired knowledge nor deliver to bullies that of public schools. A case in point is the taiwanese writer, Sanmao, who dropped out for being humiliated by her teacher, but gain literary prowess home. In the second place, homeschooled child is of character. It's on account of that they don't attempt to be like anyone else to fit in, while as state school students, we may alter personality simply to please others. What's worse, Chinese public schools adapt to educational patterns for nothing but college entrance examination which only concentrates on grades. By way of contrast, homeschooling foster creative adults of personality. Whereas, those who harbor the view that provided schools are superior state here're various activities and students meet up with beings of sorts, which is objective. However, as it is, students there contact primarily with teachers and schoolfellows, too over- protected to cope with complex society. Contrarily, kids, homeschooled ones, get in touch with men of different ages, origin and jobs and participate in activities in bigger stages. To sum up, home schooling has significant merits and more parents are gradually turning to it. For all that, it's imperative to take child's and family's requirements into account. Either way, if that's maintained, then schooling mode is immaterial.
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