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My college life
发布时间:2015-11-18 10:28:00 作者:覃慧盈  发布者:1455329420 浏览次数:2071  类别:英文作文   优秀指数:★★★
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I'm a freshman,I have already become an adult.At the sametime,My parents doesn't involove my education and not are my grocery.Sometimes,I don't know how to do.Because it rarely occurs to me that I was a senior high school student.But I know it is an opportunity to make me interact a wide variety of cultures.In College,All kinds of junk foods and snacks temptate me. Up to now,I understand I must take care of my boby healthy whenever we should balance our diet to eat nurishing foods.To surprise me,Until get to college,I can participate whichever my like campus clubs and it can open my mine.My classmates come from anywhere and it is a good idea to have access to the multicultural environment. Occasionally,when I communicated with the foreginer I feel difficult that prevent me from playing with them. As a student,I will have a discussion in which people sate different opinions about a subject of academic not a life.In my opinion,study hard is my responsibility.I will going on and never giving up.
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  • 批改教师:汤超然 ( 云南省 >> 昆明市 >> 西山区 )
    批改时间:2019/7/30 12:22:25
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    I'm a freshman,I have already become an adult.At the sametime,My parents doesn't involve my education and not are my grocery.Sometimes,I don't know how to do.Because it rarely occurs to me that I was a senior high school student.But I know it is an opportunity to make me interact a wide variety of cultures.In College,All kinds of junk foods and snacks temptate me. Up to now,I‘ve  understand(understood) I must take care of my boby healthy(health) whenever we should balance our diet to eating nurishing foods.To surprise me,Until get to college,I can participate in whichever my like campus clubs and it can open my mine.My classmates come from anywhere and it is a good idea to have access to the multicultural environment. Occasionally,when I communicated with the foreginer I feel difficult that prevent me from playing with them. As a student,I will have a discussion in which people sate different opinions about a subject of academic not a life.In my opinion,studying hard is my responsibility.I will keep going on and never giving up.

    点评:本文紧扣题意,逻辑清晰,层次丰富,能恰当运用高级语法项目,但存在少许语法错误,可确定为一类上,得分:24分(满分25分)

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