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Cooperation
发布时间:2015-10-20 21:42:57 作者:袁露菲  发布者:JeanNo3 浏览次数:2377  类别:英文作文  
[大学五年级] 辽宁省 >> 沈阳市 >> 新城子区 >> 虎石台街


Crutches left behind, two handicapped men both of whom have only one leg, supporting each other with their firm hands, are running forward fast. And there is a topic below the cartoon which says,"We can go all around the world when drawing together."
The purpose of the portrayal is to symbolically reveal that cooperation is of marvelous significance. As is well-known, it is the solidary teamwork among all the 11 members that leads a football team to victory. In the same manner, scientists can barely complete their studies with assistance from their colleagues. After all, personal limitation is bound to be followed by a rough going, which would be made up by a complementary co-worker.
In the matter of fact, partnership is not merely imperative in social life but also plays a key role in the development of a nation. As the old saying goes,"United we stand, divided we fall."Only by cooperating with others can we crack the hard nut and assure a prolonged developing.

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    Crutches left behind, both of two handicapped men  whom have only one leg, leaving crutches behind and supporting each other with their firm (firm是“坚硬的”意思,要表达“强健的”可以用robust) hands, are running forward fastly(另外两句话并列用and或者分号,不能用逗号). And there is a topic below the cartoon which says,"We can go all around the world when drawing together."
    The purpose of the portrayal (picture) is to symbolically reveal that cooperation is of marvelous (用词重复,significance已经包含了marvelous的意思)significance. As is well-known, it is the solidary teamwork among all the 11 members that leads a football team to victory. In the same manner (matter有“原因”的意思,manner多用作“习惯”), scientists can barely complete their studies without assistance from their colleagues. After all, personal limitation is bound to (用词太绝对,应该换成“有时”、“不是总是”之类) be followed by a rough going (想表达“偏离”用deviation), which would be made up by a complementary co-worker.
    In (As) the matter of fact, partnership is not merely imperative in social life but also plays a key role in the development of a nation. As the old saying goes,"United we stand, divided we fall."Only by cooperating with others can we crack the hard nut and assure a prolonged developing.

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