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Confidence
发布时间:2015-10-18 21:02:42 作者:袁露菲  发布者:JeanNo3 浏览次数:2250  类别:英文作文  
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Interestingly and amusingly, the portrayal depicts two football players who are in the face of challenge respectively hold a similar unconfident thought on their mind. While the goalkeeper mistook himself for a dwarf so that he could scarcely keep the goal, the attacker supposed his opponent as a giant and, accordingly, the attempt to shoot to score a goal seems to be unrealistic.

It is imperative to build faith during the process of overcoming unconquerable difficulties. For one thing, an acute wisdom to recognise the ability of oneself and estimate it precisely is a certain decidable factor. For another thing, no matter what kind of tough task a challenger is confronted with should never be exaggerated, for it would surely put pressure that of nonsense on the task-taker in terms of psychology, leading to negative influences.

Examples to prove the view are abundant. The most persuasive one is the case of Bill Gates, the frontier of this modern age, who has dropped from school with his sharp awareness of the true thing he was capable to do and eventually bring his dream alive-to become the a pioneer of a brand new era. On the whole, both the senses of intelligence and bravery play the indispensible role to assure a success.

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  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2015/10/27 10:01:37
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    Interestingly and amusingly, the portrayal (picture/ cartoon) depicts two football players who are in the face of challenge respectively hold a similar unconfident thought on their mind. While the goalkeeper mistake (mistook) himself for a dwarf so that he could scarcely guard (用guard太大了,改成kept就可以)the goal perfectly, the attacker takes (supporsed) his opponent as a giant and, accordingly, the attempt to shoot to score a goal seems to be unrealistic.

    It is imperative to build faith during the progress (process过程) of overcoming unconquerable difficulties. For one thing, an acute wisdom to recognise the ability of oneself and estimate it precisely is a certain decidable factor which may be of the utmost significance. For another thing, whatever (no matter how) tough task a challenger is confronted with should never be exaggerated, for in which manner (it) would surely no sense to put pressure on the task-taker meaninglessly in terms of psychology, leading to negative influences.

    Examples to prove the view are abundant. The most persuasive one is the case of Bill Gates, the frontier of this modern age, who has dropped from school with his sharp realisation (表达“意识”用awareness比较好)of the true thing he was capable to do and eventually bring his dream alive-to become the a pioneer of a brand new era. On the whole, both the senses of intelligence and bravery play the indispensible role to assure a success.

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