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Flowers In Greenhouse
发布时间:2015-10-18 13:51:41 作者:袁露菲  发布者:JeanNo3 浏览次数:2258  类别:英文作文  
[大学五年级] 辽宁省 >> 沈阳市 >> 新城子区 >> 虎石台街


Vigorously and prosperously, a flower is blooming in a greenhouse in spite of the horrible thunderstorm outside. Without the shelter, however, it can hardly survive the heavy weather for even a while. The purpose of the cartoonist is to throw out a hot social issue nowadays about the negative influence on the dotage of parents.
The single child is often over-protected so that he or she, like the delicate plant brought up in a comfort and warm house in the portrayal, is completely separated from the real complicated society. Under the circumstance, the stress of competition and peer pressure would arouse a great many of problems. On the one hand, they may not be able to deal with affairs owing to their lack of practical experience. On the other hand, highly-pressed life could also be followed by psychology related defection.
Thus, due attention should be paid to this universal phenomenon. As the old saying goes,"Adversity leads to prosperity." Elder members of the family ought to courage the adolescents to steel themselves instead of being unnecessarily protected. Only in this way can we assure them a brighter future and a better life.

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    Vigorously and prosperously, a flower is blooming in a greenhouse in spite of the horrible thunderstorm outside. Without the shelter, however, it can hardly survive the heavy weather for even a while. The purpose of the cartoonist is to throw out a hot social issue nowadays which is about the negative influence on the doted caring (dote是不及物动词,它的形容词是dotey,你要想表达“溺爱”用它的名词dotage,这句话用了定语从句修饰issue,感觉没有必要) parents bring to their children.
    The only (single) child is often over-protected so that he or she, like the delicate plant brought up in a comfort and warm house in the portrayal, is completely separated from the real complicated society (epitomise是“体现”、“象征”的意思,想表达“真实的、复杂的社会”还是用complicated或者complexepitomised as the harsh environment. Under the circumstance, the stress of work competition and peer pressure would arouse a great many of problems. On the one hand, they may not be able to deal with affairs for their (for后面是要加从句的,而且是用逗号和前面隔开,想表达“归因于”可考虑用owing to the) lack of practical experience. On the other hand, highly-pressed life could also be followed by psychology related defection.

    Thus, due attention should be paid to this universal phenomenon. As the old saying goes,"Adversity leads to prosperity." Elder members of the family ought to courage the adolescents to steel themselves instead of unnecessary protection (用being unnecessarily protected更好).Only in this way can we assure them a brighter future and a better life.

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