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Sunshine in My Life
发布时间:2012-10-22 22:03:27 作者:蒋征邑  发布者:小火锅儿3 浏览次数:11089  类别:英文作文   优秀指数:★★★★★★★
[高中三年级]


    Everyone has different ideas about life. Some say life is happy, but others feel life is unhappy. In my opinion, life is beautiful and full of sunshine.

    Several weeks ago, one of my classmates was badly ill. He had to be in hospital for a long time. But his family was too poor to collect money for him. Everyone in our class took out our pocket money. Then, we went to the street on Sunday to collect money from others. When we sent all the money to him, he and his parents were deeply moved.

  Maybe sometimes we feel unhappy, but we should believe: Life is beautiful. Help and love will be around us forever.

教师点评:
  • 批改教师:罗秀琴 ( 福建省 >> 厦门市 >> 同安区 )
    批改时间:2012/10/23 17:57:28
    点评指数:★★
    点评内容:

        Everyone has different ideas about life. Some say life is happy, but others feel life is unhappy. In my opinion, life is beautiful and full of sunshine.

        Several weeks ago, one of my classmates was badly ill. He had to be in hospital for a long time. But his family was too poor to collect money for him. Everyone in our class took out our pocket money. Then, we went to the street on Sunday to collect money from others. When we sent all the money to him, he and his parents were deeply moved.

      Maybe sometimes we feel unhappy, but we should believe: Life is beautiful. Help and love will be around us forever.

    这篇作文叙述的好!如果内容写得具体点,不要写得像流水账会好点。

  • 批改教师:冯琼英 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
    批改时间:2012/10/24 21:59:22
    点评指数:★★★
    点评内容:

        Everyone has different ideas about life. Some say life is happy, but others feel life is unhappy. In my opinion, life is beautiful and full of sunshine.

        Several weeks ago, one of my classmates was badly ill. He had to be in hospital for a long time. But his family was too poor to collect money for him. Everyone in our class took out our pocket money. Then, we went to the street on Sunday to collect money from others. When we sent all the money to him, he and his parents were deeply moved.

      Maybe sometimes we feel unhappy, but we should believe: Life is beautiful. Help and love will be around us forever.

    Let's share" Life is beautiful".

  • 批改教师:王天艳 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
    批改时间:2012/10/25 21:55:11
    点评指数:
    点评内容:

        Everyone has different ideas about life. Some say life is happy, but others feel life is unhappy. In my opinion, life is beautiful and full of sunshine.

        Several weeks ago, one of my classmates was badly ill. He had to be in hospital for a long time. But his family was too poor to collect money for him. Everyone in our class took out our pocket money. Then, we went to the street to collect money from others on Sunday. When we sent all the money to him, he and his parents were deeply moved.

      Maybe sometimes we feel unhappy, but we should believe: Life is beautiful. Help and love will be around us forever.

  • 批改教师:李晨超 ( )
    批改时间:2012/12/6 18:41:56
    点评指数:★★
    点评内容:

        Everyone has different ideas about life. Some say life is happy, but others feel life is unhappy. In my opinion, life is beautiful and full of sunshine.

        Several weeks ago, one of my classmates was badly ill. He had to be in hospital for a long time. But his family was too poor to collect money for him. Everyone in our class took out our pocket money. Then, we went to the street to collect money from others on Sunday. When we sent all the money to him, he and his parents were deeply moved.

      Maybe sometimes we feel unhappy, but we should believe: Life is beautiful. Help and love will be around us forever.

     

    Let's share the sunshine together.

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