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发布时间:2015-03-13 19:06:50 作者:周炎兰  发布者:zaizaizzz 浏览次数:3033  类别:英文作文  
[大学一年级] 广西壮族自治区 >> 柳州市 >> 城中区 >> 广西工学院


As we all know that fireworks are pretty beautiful.In many country,when people have happy events,they will shoot off fireworks,especially Chinese.To celebrate the Spring Festival,most of Chinese family shoot off fireworks.Whether does the fireworks good for the earth?NO! When you shoot off the fireworks,it can produce carbon dioxide and noise.Fireworks are dangerous for children,they can hurt children easily.The beautiful of fireworks is just for a while.the fireworks disappear just like they never exist,but they pollut the earth and they are dangerous. In my opinion,we should shoot off fireworks as few as we can to protect our earth.When you have happy events,you can share with your friends and families,it is no need to shoot off fireworks.
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    As we all know that fireworks are pretty beautiful.In many country,when people have happy events,they will shoot off fireworks,especially Chinese.To celebrate the Spring Festival,most of Chinese family shoot off fireworks.Whether does the fireworks good for the earth?NO! When you shoot off the fireworks,it can produce carbon dioxide and noise.Fireworks are dangerous for children,they can hurt children easily.The beautiful of fireworks is just for a while.the fireworks disappear just like they never exist,but they pollut the earth and they are dangerous. In my opinion,we should shoot off fireworks as few as we can to protect our earth.When you have happy events,you can share with your friends and families,it is no need to shoot off fireworks.
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