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Changes in my dream

发布时间：2012-10-15 21:50:03 作者：吕娇娇  发布者：lvjiaojiao 浏览次数：3503  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★

Everyone has dreams in their heart. My dreams are changing every time along with the times’ developing.

In my child, I hope I can become a teacher. While I looked my teachers standing on the platform, I admired and respected them very much. Teaching is a holy occupation which can make a great difference to someone.

Gradually, along with my age’s increasing, my dream changes. Once my grandfather died from illness, I had a idea to be doctor. Owning to looking my grandfather suffered pains from illness, I am willing to help those who are bearing diseases. I want to keep more patients from illness.

I didn’t certain my final dream until I graduated from senior middle school. I want to be a building engineer. It isn’t related to other elements, but only depended on my interesting. I love architecture and want to design. It’s my dream , I love this vocation.

Individual interesting can greatly increase one’s motive power. I will try my best to achieve my dreams regardless of what difficulties appear in the future.

• 批改教师：王天艳 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2012/10/16 20:14:35
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  Everyone has dreams a dream in their heart. My dreams are changing every time along with the times’ developing. With the time development,my dream is changing.

  In my childhood, I hoped I can become a teacher. While I looked saw my teachers standing on the platform, I admired and respected them very much. Teaching is a holy occupation which can make a great difference to someone.

  Gradually, along with my age’s increasing, as I grew older, my dream changes changed. Once my grandfather died from illness, I had a an idea to be a doctor. Owning to looking my grandfather suffered pains from illness, I am willing to help those who are bearing diseases. I want to keep more patients from illness.

  I didn’t certain my final dream until I graduated from senior middle school. I want to be a building engineer. It isn’t related to other elements, but only depended on my interesting. I love architecture and want to design. It’s my dream , I love this vocation.

  Individual interesting can greatly increase one’s motive power. I will try my best to achieve my dreams regardless of what difficulties appear in the future.

• 批改教师：杜宝红 ( 山东省 >> 泰安市 >> 岱岳区 >> 泰山菁华双语学校 )
  批改时间：2012/10/21 13:00:59
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  Everyone has dreams ^{a dream} in their heart   ^hearts. My dreams are changing every time along with the times’ developing.^{Along with the time development,my dream is always changing.}

  In my child ^childhood, I hope ^hoped I can ^could become a teacher. While I looked my teachers standing on the platform, I admired and respected them very much. ^{Whenever I see the teacher standing on the podium ,I admire and respect them very much.}Teaching is a holy occupation which can make a great difference to someone.

  Gradually, along with my age’s increasing, my dream changes. Once my grandfather died from illness, I had a idea to be doctor. Owning to looking my grandfather suffered pains from illness, I am willing to help those who are bearing diseases. I want to keep more patients from illness.^{Gradually,as I grow older,my dreams begin to change.Because of my grandfather passed away,I have a wish to become a doctor.I would like to study medicine,to alleviate suffering from diseases like my grandfather.} 

  I didn’t certain my final dream until I graduated from senior middle school. I want to be a building engineer. It isn’t related to other elements, but only depended on my interesting. I love architecture and want to design. It’s my dream , I love this vocation.^{Until I graduated from high school,I'm sure my dream.I want to be an egineer,it depengs on my interest,and other unrelated.I love architecture art and design.I chase my dream.}

  Individual interesting ^interest can greatly increase one’s motive power. I will try my best to achieve my dreams regardless of what difficulties appear in the future.