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The fight against air pollution

发布时间：2014-09-20 16:21:03 作者：明鑫  发布者：2422 浏览次数：5531  类别：中文作文  

The air isn't as fresh as that in the old days. One of the reasons is the development of the science.Science makes the air pollute. The daily pollution gets the water dirty.People  live in cities complain all the time.

Governments take action to solve this problem, such as,planting trees, removing the illegitimate factories. They also cooperate with businessmen to appeal more investment on the environment.Because of these effects, the air becomes fresher than before.But we can't relax. It's a great project.We must be self-conscious. Don't be a litterbug. Protecting environment is everyone's duty.

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2014/9/20 11:14:13
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  The air isn't as fresh as ^{that in} the old days. One of the reasons is the development of the science.Science gets (makes) the air polluted (pollute).The cars'steam. The power plants'contamination.The daily pollution gets the water dirty.People who live in cities complain all the time.

  Governments take action to govern (solve) this problem, such as,plant^ing trees, remove (removing) the illegitimate factories. They also cooperation (cooperate) with businessmen.The businessmen ^{to appeal more} invest^ment on the environment.Because of these actions (effects) the air becomes fresher than before.But we can't relax. It's a great project.We must be self-conscious. Don't be a litter bug. Protect^ing environment is everyone's duty.

• 批改教师：Jeenn Lee Hsieh ( 外国 >> 美国 )
  批改时间：2014/9/22 5:32:45
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  The air isn't as fresh as that in the old days. One of the reasons is the development of the science.Science makes the air pollute. The daily pollution gets the water dirty.People  live in cities complain all the time.

  Governments take action to solve this problem, such as,planting trees, removing the illegitimate factories. They also cooperate with businessmen to appeal more investment on the environment.Because of these effects, the air becomes fresher than before.But we can't relax. It's a great project.We must be self-conscious. Don't be a litterbug. Protecting environment is everyone's duty.

  
  

  The air today is no longer as fresh as it used to be.  This is particularly the case in big cities due to increased pollution as a result of too many vehicles on the streets. Complaints about dirty air are being heard everyday.

  
  

  Comments: It is a good beginning.  The next step would be to learn how to make longer sentences and complext sentences.