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发布时间:2014-09-18 16:17:29 作者:龚四喜  发布者:1591133909 浏览次数:2542  类别:中文作文  
[大学二年级] 辽宁省 >> 沈阳市 >> 沈阳市经济技术开发区


Hello, Michael, heard that recently you will come to shenyang, now I introduce you to shenyang. Shenyang is China's most famous the charm of a big city. Here people are friendly and hospitable and very friendly, I believe you will soon be able to get along with them. Shenyang is a mysterious city, here is the birthplace of the qing dynasty, the profound historical atmosphere. When you come here to visit the reputation sites for which you will be great humanistic technology miracle. I eagerly waiting for welcome you to come to shenyang. Bless you!
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  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2014/9/19 12:33:54
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    Hello, Michael, heard (Knowing) that recently you will come to shenyang, now I introduce (tell) you to shenyang (something about Shenyang).Shenyang is China's the most famous the charm of a big (big,charming) city. Here people are friendly and hospitable and very friendly, I believe you will soon be able to get along with them. Shenyang is a mysterious city, here is (and) the birthplace of the qing (Qing) dynasty, which was full of the profound historical atmosphere. When you come here to visit the reputation sites for which you will be (think that it is a )great humanistic technology miracle. I am eagerly waiting (to wait) for welcome (welcoming) you to come to shenyang. Bless you!
  • 批改教师:Jeenn Lee Hsieh ( 外国 >> 美国 )
    批改时间:2014/9/22 5:58:25
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    Hello, Michael, heard that recently you will come to shenyang, now I introduce you to shenyang. Shenyang is China's most famous the charm of a big city. Here people are friendly and hospitable and very friendly, I believe you will soon be able to get along with them. Shenyang is a mysterious city, here is the birthplace of the qing dynasty, the profound historical atmosphere. When you come here to visit the reputation sites for which you will be great humanistic technology miracle. I eagerly waiting for welcome you to come to shenyang. Bless you!


    Hello Michael,


    Welcome to Shenyang, a city of charm and history.  You would find the people here being most friendly and hospitable.


    There are various sites of historical and scenic interests which I will try to show you.


    See you soon.

    Have fun.

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