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To my friend
发布时间:2014-05-17 00:01:45 作者:张池  发布者:huashuicici 浏览次数:2615  类别:英文作文  
[大学一年级] 河南省 >> 郑州市 >> 金水区 >> 龙子湖街道祭城路


                               To my friend

       Friends for me are important in my life. Sometimes , I often dream my friends who did something with me together . I also missed them and recall with we did in the past. Although we were separated from far distance and we studied in different universities ,I often take a track with my best friends.

      Especially, one of my friend who is named RongRong and she is my best friend . I familiarized with her when I risen middle school in Grade 2. She was a transient student from Guangdong to our town, and she is native who went home study to be admitted by the university . Because I often went home on foot at that time, so I often saw her . Therefore , we were gradually familiar with each other .We often communicated with each other ,so I knew where  her home and wether it was nearby my home. Sometimes I often played with her when I had free time at home on  holiday. Now , though I studied in college in outside province, while we often chatted in telephone or computer.

      What let me unforgot is that we were gather together time. She  companied with me facing difficulties and bearing pain in order to pass exam, and we shared with blissful and happy together . I remember that we studied together and suffered pain , tired and faced happiness  together . So I`m really value you this friend and treasure our friendship.

      No longer , you will face college entrance examination .I really hope you can make a good mark to accomplish you dream that go to a good college. Here ,Good luck. I always feel that my world is not beautiful .If you are good, it will be sunny. memories always were good and beautiful. To my friend ,we are gathered together .Friendship is like red rose  let us love it deeply.



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  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2014/5/14 15:35:04
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    Friends for me are important of (in) my life. Sometimes,I often dream my friends who did something with me together.I also missed them and recall what we done (did) interesting things inn (in) the past. Although we were separated from far distance and we were study (studied) in different university,(universities) I often take a track with my best friends.

    Especially one of my friend who is named RongRong and she is my best friend.I familiarized with her when I risen middle school in 2 grade (Grade 2).She was a shift (transient) student from Guangdong to our town and she is native who went home study to rise (be admitted by the) university.Because I often went home on foot in the middle school (at that time) so I often saw her as me went home on foot .Therefore,we were gradually familiar with each other.We often communicated with each other,so I knew where was her home was which (and wether) it was nearby my home.Sometimes I often played with her when I had free time at home on  holiday.Now though I studied in college in outside province,while we often chatted in telephone or computer.

    Let (What let) me unforgettable (unforgot) is that we were gather together time. She was company (companiedwith me faced (facing) difficult (difficulties) and bearing pain in (in order torise (pass) exam and we shared with blissful and happy together.I remembered that we studied together and whatever (suffered) pain,tired and faced happiness we were duty them together. So I`m really value you this friend and treasure our friendship.

    No longer,you will face college entrance examination.I really hope you can make a good mark to accomplish you dream that go to a good college. Here,Good lucky to you (good luck). I always feel that my world is not beautiful .If you are well (good), is (it will be) sunny in memories,always were good and beautiful. To my friend,we are gathered together.Friendship is like pure (red) rose let us love it deeply.



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