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Mountain-climbing

发布时间：2014-05-16 22:47:08 作者：张池  发布者：huashuicici 浏览次数：3212  类别：英文作文  

Mountain-climbing

      In my memories,I often climbed mountains, but it was low mountains.

      When is was Tomb-sweeping Day, we often climb mountain to do tomb-sweeping. Sometimes, I was used climbing mountain of our garden to weed out weeds. Specially, when the fruit ripen season was coming. We always picked  up fruit of the mountain. This fruit is such as Longan , Leechee and Plum. I also remembered that  my sister and I climbed the mountain in order to pick up Leechee to sell ,we did not have breakfast but ate Leechee as our breakfast. Now ,I think that is so crazy. As the saying goes 'Up the hill is easy ,down the hill'. So when we took Leechee to home  that was so difficult,  but we felt interesting  and full.

     One day, I went to Song mountain with my friend . We decided to climb the mountain which we did not depend on anything for just climbed step by step of the mountain .At first ,we had most passion of climbing mountain, and we always asked other visitors from hill to down hill that we had how many miles need to go. But they always said that we had half hour reached the hill. In fact ,it is not that. Then  when we were tired of mountain -climbing ,we were no brief to stick to climb, because we were really tired and hungry to climb mountain .eventually,  we were experienced  many mountains and got up the hill.

      At the hill, we saw many different things ,and thought that we were so good to climb to hill. It was so great . I never felt that pain and happy were contact with together .So always bittersweet, You do one thing which you need stand the pain and stick  to do that .We all know that 'No pains ,no gains'.

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  Mountain-climbing

  In my memories,I often climbed mountains, but it was low mountains.

  When ^{it was} Tomb-sweeping Day, we often climbing mountain to visit a grave (do tomb-sweeping).Sometimes, I was used climbing mountain of our garden to weed out weeds. Specially, when the fruit ripe (ripen) season was coming. We always picked up fruit of ^the mountain. This fruit is such as Longan,Leechee and Plum. I also remembered that I and my sister (my sister and I) climbed ^the mountain in order to pick up Leechee to sell ,we were (did) not ate (have) breakfast but ate Leechee as our breakfast. Now ,I think that is so crazy. As the saying goes 'Up the hill is easy ,down the hill'. So when we took Leechee to home  that was so difficult,  but we felt interesting  and full.

  One day,I went to Song mountain with my friend. We decided to climb ^the mountain which we ^did not depended on anything for just climbed step by step of ^the mountain .At first ,we had most passion ^of climbing mountain, and we always asked other people visitors from hill to down hill that we had how much (many) miles need to go. But they always said that we had half hour reached the hill. In fact ,it is not that. Then  when we were tired of ^the mountain-climbing,we were (had) no brief to stick to climb, because we were really tired and hungry to climb mountain .eventually,  we were experienced  many mountains and got up the hill.

  At the hill, we saw many different things ,and thought that we were so good to climb to hill. It was so great . I never felt that pain and happy were contact with together .So always bittersweet, You do one thing which you need stand the pain and stick  to do that .We all know that 'No pains ,no gains'.