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发布时间：2014-02-19 16:58:13 作者：白钰  发布者：bailongmei 浏览次数：2612  类别：中文作文  

假如你是温迪wendy，请根据下面的要点写一篇70词左右的报道。

要点：1、8月14日发生了一次山体滑坡（landslide）;

      2、连续两天大雨后，山体滑坡发生在第三天下午；

      3、那天有个女孩与她母亲在家，中午父亲匆忙回到家，并叫她们赶快离开；

      4、雨大，父亲告诉她们带好雨伞；

      5、这时房子开始摇晃，人们非常害怕，迅速跑开了；

      6、此后第二天上午回家时，女孩发现房子没了，到处是玻璃和砖块，女孩感到很悲伤。

Hello ! I'm Wendy.I want to tell everyone,the August 14th happed landslide ,  after two days of heavy rain ,the landslide happed at the  three day afternoon.That day ,they have a girl and her mother at home,in the afternoon,her father go to work hurry and told them left .The rain is heavily,father tell them  bring an umbrella.At the moment ,the house is Shake.People are very  afraid ,hurry to run up .At the second morning the go back home ,the girl find the house isn't , is full of glass and bricks,the girl felt very sad.

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  假如你是温迪wendy，请根据下面的要点写一篇70词左右的报道。

  要点：1、8月14日发生了一次山体滑坡（landslide）;

  2、连续两天大雨后，山体滑坡发生在第三天下午；

  3、那天有个女孩与她母亲在家，中午父亲匆忙回到家，并叫她们赶快离开；

  4、雨大，父亲告诉她们带好雨伞；

  5、这时房子开始摇晃，人们非常害怕，迅速跑开了；

  6、此后第二天上午回家时，女孩发现房子没了，到处是玻璃和砖块，女孩感到很悲伤。

  Hello ! I'm Wendy.I want to tell everyone,the August 14th happed landslide (The landslide happened on the August 14th caused by heavy rain in last two days),  after two days of heavy rain ,the landslide happed at the  three day afternoon.That day ,they have a girl and her mother ^were at home,in the afternoon,her father go to work hurry and told them left (went home hurrily and told them leave the house quickly).The rain (Since it )is ^raining heavily,father tell (told) them  bring an umbrella.At the moment ,the house is Shake(shaking).People are (were) very  afraid ,hurry to run up .At (In) the second morning the go (they were) back home ,the girl find (found) the house isn't (had gone), is full of glass and bricks ^{were everywhere},the girl (She) felt very sad.