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My Best Friend

发布时间：2013-06-08 19:39:17 作者：刘祥娣  发布者：liuxiangdi 浏览次数：3155  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★★★

  My best friend is Xiao Li.She is 12 years old.She is 154 cm tall.She is 51 kg.She has long hair and big eyes.She is taller and thinner than me.She likes swimming,reding books,go fishing and watch TV.She is from China.She is pretty and quiet.She likes dogs.She like winter.Because she can skate and make a snowman.She's birthday is in june.

  She is a student.She often get up at 6:00 a.m.She usually eat breakfast at 6:20 a.m.She go to school at 7:00 a.m.Usually she go to school on foot.Sometimes,she go by bike.She likes pork,tofu,mutton,potatoes and cabbage.They're hoalthy and tasty.Her father is a driver.Her mother is an accountant.

  She want to be a TV reporter one day!

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/6/8 22:14:21
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    My best friend is Xiao Li.She is 12 years old.She is 154 cm tall.She is 51 kg.She has long hair and big eyes.She is taller and thinner than me.She likes swimming,reding books,go fishing and watch^ing TV.She is from China.She is pretty and quiet.She likes dogs.She like winter.Because she can skate and make a snowman.She's birthday is in june(June).

    She is a student.She often get^s up at 6:00 a.m.She usually eat^s breakfast at 6:20 a.m.She go^es to school at 7:00 a.m.Usually she go^es to school on foot.Sometimes,she go^es by bike.She likes pork,tofu,mutton,potatoes and cabbage.They're hoalthy (healthy)and tasty.Her father is a driver.Her mother is an accountant.

    She want^s to be a TV reporter one day!

  文章整体不错，但注意单数第三人称谓语动词后加s或es

• 批改教师：陈伟 ( 山东省 >> 烟台市 >> 烟台工贸技师学院 )
  批改时间：2013/6/9 19:06:05
  点评指数：★
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    My best friend is Xiao Li.She is 12 years old.She is 154 cm tall.She is 51 kg.She has long hair and big eyes.She is taller and thinner than me.She likes swimming,reding books,go^ing fishing and watch^ing TV.She is from China.She is pretty and quiet.She likes dogs.She like^s winter.^,Because^because she can skate and make a snowman.She's ^Her birthday is in june（June）.

    She is a student.She often get^s up at 6:00 a.m.She usually eat ^have breakfast at 6:20 a.m.She go^es to school at 7:00 a.m.Usually she go^es to school on foot.Sometimes,she go^es by bike.She likes pork,tofu,mutton,potatoes and cabbage.They're hoalthy ^healthy and tasty.Her father is a driver.Her mother is an accountant.

    She want^s to be a TV reporter one day!

  点评：刘祥娣同学从多个方面对自己的好朋友Xiao Li进行了描述，描写的非常详细，也看出来，祥娣同学也下了不少功夫，很不错！关于文中细节，老师说两句：

  1. 文中标绿色的两个句子属于同一结构，通过这两个句子也可以看出来，作者对这个句式掌握比较到位。在英语句子中，当多个并列的单词，短语等并列出现时，前面的都用逗号，只有最后一个用and连接。前面的所有逗号都相当于and的功能。这些并列单词或者结构，必须要保持一致，例如，名词就都得是名词，并且词义也都属于同一范畴，像第二句：

  She likes pork,tofu,mutton,potatoes and cabbage.

  同样，若并列的内容是doing，那么都得是-ing形式,例如，****句：

  She likes swimming,reding books,go^ing fishing and watch^ing TV.

  2. 文中的because为什么首字母要小写，以及前面为什么要把句号改为逗号，我抽时间在网页指导文章里关于这种问题给解释解释，在这里就先不赘述。

• 批改教师：冯琼英 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2013/6/10 14:22:40
  点评指数：★★★
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    My best friend is Xiao Li.She is 12 years old.She is 154 cm tall.She is 51 kg.She has long hair and big eyes.She is taller and thinner than me.She likes swimming,reding books,go fishing and watching TV.She is from China.She is pretty and quiet.She likes dogs.She likes winter.Because she can skate and make a snowman.She's （Her）birthday is in june（June）.

    She is a student.She often gets up at 6:00 a.m.She usually eats breakfast at 6:20 a.m.She goes to school at 7:00 a.m.Usually she goes to school on foot.Sometimes,she goes by bike.She likes pork,tofu,mutton,potatoes and cabbage.They're hoalthy(healthy) and tasty.Her father is a driver.Her mother is an accountant.

    She wants to be a TV reporter one day!

  点评：祥娣的英语写作水平，进步真是迅速。不要忘了does形式的运用奥！