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My College Life

发布时间：2013-05-19 22:35:07 作者：梁琦  发布者：649952750@qq.com 浏览次数：5707  类别：中文作文   优秀指数：★★

As time goes by , it is two years since I began to be a freshman.But in my memory of the two past years , I fell confused.

   When I left my family and friends and started my new life , I had so many dreams.I looked forward to donging everything to enrich my experience during the four years ,including study,making friends,participating in group activities and so on .

  However I lost my passion on study even everything now.I skip now and than and waste lost of time.I realize that it is a terrible situation.

  People should have a goal ,only that he can know the value of existence. Young man ,believe yourself,you can do it .

• 批改教师：陈伟 ( 山东省 >> 烟台市 >> 烟台工贸技师学院 )
  批改时间：2013/5/20 18:17:38
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      As time goes by, Time is slipping away and it is two years since 

  I began to be a freshman.^However, But in my memory of (looking back to ) the two past (past two) years, I fell (feel) confused ^now.

      When I left my family and friends and started my (the) new ^university life, I ^{,at that time,} had so many dreams. I looked forward to donging 

  (trying) everything to enrich my experience during the four years , including study, making friends, participating in group activities 

  and so on .

      However ^,I lost (lose all) my passion on study even everything now.

  I skip (hop around)now and than (then) and waste lost (lots) of time.

  I realize that it is a terrible situation.

      People should have a goal, only that he can (can he) know the value 

  of existence. 

      Young man ,believe yourself, ^andyou can do it .

   

  In my opinion, no issue is as good as passion and dreams to make our life more colorful, so I suggest that you should catch your own passion and dreams fast. In addition, I would like to share a poem with you.

   

  Hold fast to dreams 紧紧抓住梦想

  For if dreams die 梦想若是消亡

  Life is a broken-winged bird 生命就象鸟儿折了翅膀

  That can never fly. 再也不能飞翔

  Hold fast to dreams 紧紧抓住梦想，

  For when dreams go 梦想若是消丧

  Life is a barren field 生命就像贫瘠的荒野

  Frozen only with snow雪覆冰封，万物不再生长

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/5/21 21:52:43
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  As time goes by , it is two years since I began to be a freshman.But in my memory of the two past years , I fell confused.

     When I left my family and friends and started my new life , I had so many dreams.I looked forward to donging（doing) everything to enrich my experience during the four years ,including study^ing,making friends,^and participating in group activities and so on .

    However I lost my passion on study even everything now.I skip now and than and waste lost of time.I realize that it is a terrible situation.

    People should have a goal ,only that he can(can) he know the value of existence. Young man ,believe ⁱⁿ yourself,you can do it .