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The gratitude that influenced me most

发布时间：2013-03-09 23:09:10 作者：孙芸芸  发布者：11181120 浏览次数：4692  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★

    Hello,everybody!My name is SunYunyun.Today,I'm glad to talk with you what influenced me most.I'm a girl who love smile.In the around of me,there are many friends asked me"why are you so happy everyday?"I want to tell you that because I thanks for everything in my life,however it is sweet or bitter.So I deliver my smile to the people who I want to thanks.In my life,the attitude of gratitude helped me a lot and influenced me most.  

    From our family to society,gratitude is the key to keep harmony. Our parents give us the chance to live and bring us up,we should thanks for our parents and the family will be happy.With us growing up,we will make many friends,our friends play an important role in our life,so we should thanks for our friends.In our student life,there are many teachers theach us how to study and live,so we should thanks for our teachers.And so on,there are so many people we should thanks.So I put gratitude into my heart.I hope you will thanks for the people who in your life too.Thank you!

 

     

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      Hello,everybody!My name is SunYunyun（姓和名之间空格）.Today,I'm glad to talk with you what influenced me most.I'm a girl who love smile.（smiling)In the around of me,there are many friends asked me"why are you so happy everyday?"I want to tell you that because I thanks (appreciate，下同）for everything in my life,however (whatever)it is sweet or bitter.So I deliver my smile to the people who I want to thanks.In my life,the attitude of (towards)gratitude helped (helps)me a lot and influenced (influences)me most.  

      From our family to society,gratitude is the key to keep harmony. Our parents give us the chance to live and bring us up,we should thanks for our parents and the family will be happy.With us growing up,we will make many friends,our friends (who)play an important role in our life,so we should thanks for our friends.(them)In our student life,there are many teachers theach us how to study and live,so we should thanks for our teachers.(them)And so on,there are so many people we should thanks.So I put gratitude into my heart.I hope you will thanks for the people who in your life too.Thank you!

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