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Personal Information Leakage
发布时间:2013-02-15 13:23:31 作者:范诸平  发布者:fanzhuping 浏览次数:9262  类别:英文作文  
[大学一年级] 黑龙江省 >> 哈尔滨市 >> 东北林业大学


An online survey conducted in 2011 showed that nearly 90 percent of the people polled claimed their personal information had been leaked and they suffered from it. Take a lawyer who was polled for example. He registered some of his personal information some years ago when he bought insurance for his new car. Since then, every year he received dozens of calls from many companies trying to sell him insurances.

With personal information leaked, your nightmare would start. You would be continuously bombarded by anonymous messages or phone calls via mobile phones and other communication channels for private tutoring, apartment sales, insurance, etc. Worse still, if your confidential information was known to criminals, you might have large purchases on your credit card, funds withdrawn from your bank account, and even major loans taken out in your name.

To protect your personal information, the best way is thinking before acting. For instance, if you don't want your personal information out there, avoid filling out forms requiring private information for "free draws " or other promotions. These are ways to get your name, address and telephone number on a junk mail or telemarketing list.

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  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2013/2/16 13:45:50
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    An online survey conducted in 2011 showed that nearly 90 percent of the people polled and (poll和claim都是动词)claimed their personal information had been leaked and they suffered from it. TakeTaking,此为主语)a lawyer who was polled for an example. He registered some of his personal information some years ago when he bought insurance for his new car. Since then, every year he received dozens of calls from many companies trying to sell him insurances.

    With personal information leaked, your nightmare would (will)start. You would (might,情态动词,推测)be continuously bombarded by anonymous messages or phone calls via mobile phones and other communication channels for private tutoring, apartment sales, insurance, etc. Worse still, if your confidential information wasis)known toby)criminals, you might have large purchases on your credit card, funds withdrawn from your bank account, and even major loans taken out in your name.

    To protect your personal information, the best way is thinking before acting. For instance, if you don't want your personal information out there, avoid filling out forms requiring private information for "free draws " or other promotions. These are ways to get (getting)your name, address and telephone number on a junk mail or telemarketing list.

  • 批改教师:李晨超 ( )
    批改时间:2013/2/26 8:50:26
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    An online survey conducted in 2011 showed that nearly 90 percent of the people polled and (poll和claim都是动词)claimed their personal information had been leaked and they suffered from it. TakeTaking,此为主语)a lawyer who was polled for an example. He registered some of his personal information some years ago when he bought insurance for his new car. Since then, every year he received dozens of calls from many companies trying to sell him insurances.

    With personal information leaked, your nightmare would (will)start. You would (might,情态动词,推测)be continuously bombarded by anonymous messages or phone calls via mobile phones and other communication channels for private tutoring, apartment sales, insurance, etc. Worse still, if your confidential information wasis)known toby)criminals, you might have large purchases on your credit card, funds withdrawn from your bank account, and even major loans taken out in your name.

    To protect your personal information, the best way is thinking before acting. For instance, if you don't want your personal information out there, avoid filling out forms requiring private information for "free draws " or other promotions. These are ways to get (getting)your name, address and telephone number on a junk mail or telemarketing list.

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