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Can Money Buy Happiness?

发布时间：2013-01-09 21:50:57 作者：曾泽楠  发布者：527267874 浏览次数：3501  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★★★

      Can money buy happiness? Different people have different opinions. Some think yes, while others hold the opposite.
      It is true that with enough money one can buy all the things one wants, and live a life of comfort and security. However, it is equally true that lack of money causes great distress. It is a common view that "money is the root of all evil." The pursuit of money drives many people to cheat and steal. In some places there is nothing that cannot be bought with money, resulting in corrupt societies where everybody is miserable.
      So, money does not necessarily mean happiness. It all depends on how it is used. If we make honest and sensible use of money, it can be a stepping-stone to happiness l Although money cannot buy happiness, it can make happiness possible if it is employed sensibly.

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/1/10 14:02:50
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        Can money buy happiness? Different people have different opinions. Some think yes, while others hold the opposite ^view.
        It is true that with enough money one can buy all the things one (that he )wants, and live a life of comfort and security. However, it is equally true that lack of money causes great distress. （此句话与后文论述关系不大，删去）It is a common view that "money is the root of all evil." The pursuit of money drives many people to cheat and steal. In some places there is nothing that cannot be bought with money, resulting in corrupt societies where everybody is miserable.
        So, money does not necessarily mean happiness. It all depends on how it is used. If we make honest and sensible use of money, it can be a stepping-stone to happiness l Although money cannot buy happiness, it can make happiness possible if it is employed （是“雇用”的意思）sensibly.
     条理清晰，内容还需充实。
  
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   Can money buy happiness? Different people have different opinions. Some think yes, while others hold the opposite ^view.
        It is true that with enough money one can buy all the things one (that he )wants, and live a life of comfort and security. However, it is equally true that lack of money causes great distress. （此句话与后文论述关系不大，删去）It is a common view that "money is the root of all evil." The pursuit of money drives many people to cheat and steal. In some places there is nothing that cannot be bought with money, resulting in corrupt societies where everybody is miserable.
        So, money does not necessarily mean happiness. It all depends on how it is used. If we make honest and sensible use of money, it can be a stepping-stone to happiness l Although money cannot buy happiness, it can make happiness possible if it is employed （是“雇用”的意思）sensibly.
  

  点评：没记错的话，这应该是大学四级作文题。在以后的日子里要多读，多看，最好能尝试着发表自己的看法。加油！

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  批改时间：2013/2/9 19:40:22
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        Can money buy happiness? Different people have different opinions. Some think yes, while others hold the opposite.
        It is true that with enough money one can buy all the things one wants, and live a life of comfort and security. However, it is equally true that lack of money causes great distress. It is a common view that "money is the root of all evil." The pursuit of money drives many people to cheat and steal. In some places there is nothing that cannot be bought with money, resulting in corrupt societies where everybody is miserable.
        So, money does not necessarily mean happiness. It all depends on how it is used. If we make honest and sensible use of money, it can be a stepping-stone to happiness l Although money cannot buy happiness, it can make happiness possible if it is employed sensibly.
  
  点评： 本文阐述的观点明确，我们是金钱的主人。理性的运用金钱我们就是幸福的主人。